http://users.livejournal.com/_shellofmyself/ ([identity profile] http://users.livejournal.com/_shellofmyself/) wrote in [personal profile] whynot 2004-03-23 12:31 am (UTC)


But Billy. There's Billy, see. He's a detail in Dom's life that makes him forget that humans are allowed to be human. Are real humans allowed to make mistakes this big? Billy is one detail in Dom's life that... Billy is...

Billy was.

The past tense is everything.


So. I really, really liked that part. Because it stood out and because the writing of it was just ... yes. This whole story! So perfectly written, so much so that while reading it I consistently kept thinking, I wish I wrote this, or could at least write something half as good as this.

Beautiful.

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