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Las ([personal profile] whynot) wrote2003-10-27 03:44 am

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In which Loki quotes Good Omens.

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Happy Hour


You're on the roof of a shopping mall. This has happened before.

You're on the roof of a shopping mall or Walmart or middle-class apartment. Usually you're there when the sun goes down or happy hour begins. Whichever's first.

The sun is setting, stretching shadows against the sky.

Bartleby looks at the bottle in your hand and says, "I don't know know why you even bother with that."

"You've got it backwards," you say. "Why do you even bother waiting for something that's never going to happen?"

"Because we're talking about home. Home, Loki. Not yesterday's newspaper or a bag of Doritos. Home."

You're sitting on the edge of the roof, staring at the parking lot below. Bartleby's behind you, slowly pacing back and forth and back, which used to irritate you, but you get used to things after a few centuries. When you speak, the words are familiar to you. You've had this conversation before, but you always have it again and again.

You get used to things after a few centuries.

"Just give it up, man," you say. "We're never going to get home. We've been cast out of Paradise like Adam and Eve... Well, Adam and Steve. We might as well not be angels anymore."

Bartleby reaches inside his shirt, tugs, and winces. He holds something out to you.

A feather.

"Adam and Eve were still human when they were thrown out of Eden," says Bartleby.

You take the feather. "That was why they got thrown out in the first place, wasn't it?"

"We're still angels. Nothing's changed."

You raise your eyebrows.

"That much," he amends. Bartleby's getting that look again. You don't like that look. That look says, 'It pains me that when I go back home, you won't be with me. I wish you wouldn't make bad choices.'

Fuck that. That's the kind of attitude that gives you guys such a bad rap on Earth.

"I just wish we haven't made the mistakes we did," he says.

"Everyone makes mistakes."

"Don't you give me the party line. People... or things, whatever, like you and me, we've got no excuse to make mistakes."

"So obviously we're not mistakes. We're part of the plan."

"We're made to obey His divine will. How the hell could we fuck up?"

"Exactly. God works in mysterious ways."

"Loki, please quote something other than the Hallmark cards or I will smack you like a bitch."

So you do. "The whole point was that when a human was good or bad it was because they wanted to be. People couldn't become truly holy unless they also had the opportunity to be definitely wicked."

"What are you saying?"

"On one hand, angels and humans and demons are on the same level: God created us. And we all just do what we do. We do what we do, forever a work in progress, eternally headed for holiness. Angels, humans, demons, fallen or otherwise. We're all on our way."

There's a long pause before he replies. "Stop drinking that shit."

Bartleby swipes your drink and lets it slip out of his hand as he walks away. You watch his retreating form, with his hands raised like a white flag, and you can't bring yourself to protest. You look at the feather in your hand and bring it to your lips. You blow. The wind carries it a few feet, then you turn around and follow Bartleby because you don't want to see it touch the ground.

[identity profile] brandybuck.livejournal.com 2003-10-26 12:21 pm (UTC)(link)
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That's all I have to say. Well, that and "gorgeous", but that's just a synonym, isn't it.

[identity profile] twoskeletons.livejournal.com 2003-10-29 07:54 am (UTC)(link)
Aww, thank you much. *is grateful and happy*
*is genuinely grateful and happy, because she suspects LJ has been eating comments for this particular entry* I mean, it says there's a comment there, but when I click it, the page comes up commentless. Frustration ensues!

So yes, <3.

[identity profile] crantz.livejournal.com 2003-10-31 04:17 am (UTC)(link)
found this via [livejournal.com profile] permetaform's journal.

this is lovely.

[identity profile] twoskeletons.livejournal.com 2003-10-31 10:25 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. :)

[identity profile] alevai.livejournal.com 2003-11-09 11:20 am (UTC)(link)
so, Dogma and Good Omens, eh?

*bows down and discreetly attaches handcuff to your ankle*
there we go.

loved this line...
The wind carries it a few feet, then you turn around and follow Bartleby because you don't want to see it touch the ground.
Says a lot about their relationship, says I.

:-)

[identity profile] twoskeletons.livejournal.com 2003-11-09 12:14 pm (UTC)(link)
*shakes ankle and watches the metal clink around*

So, er... this is a good thing, right?

Re: :-)

[identity profile] alevai.livejournal.com 2003-11-09 01:07 pm (UTC)(link)
well, yes of course. now I shall always know where you are and thus never miss another of your fantasmo fics. dude.

cheers

[identity profile] twoskeletons.livejournal.com 2003-11-09 05:14 pm (UTC)(link)
Ah. How delightful. I do hope I won't disappoint, then. :-)

[identity profile] nevacaruso.livejournal.com 2003-11-18 08:34 pm (UTC)(link)
I love Dogma fanfic. Those two just holler "Slash us! Slash us please!" from the screen, don't they?

And this actually worked in the second person, and was lovely besides. Fab characterization of Bartleby in particular.

[identity profile] twoskeletons.livejournal.com 2003-11-18 11:25 pm (UTC)(link)
Those two just holler "Slash us! Slash us please!" from the screen, don't they?
*g* I wouldn't give that an outright 'no'...

And gracias.
Fab characterization of Bartleby in particular.
Aw, thanks, man. I appreciate it :).

[identity profile] dreamerneva.livejournal.com 2003-11-30 09:34 am (UTC)(link)
There's a long pause before he replies. "Stop drinking that shit."

I love that line. It doesn't interrupt the story, but it's perfect for...something. I don't know if what I'm thinking of has a name. I'm quite slow this afternoon. I can't stop liking your fiction. It's too good! Dogma rocks my socks, too. And wow. I didn't know there could be awesome fanfiction thereof!
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[personal profile] jb_slasher 2003-12-18 04:51 am (UTC)(link)
Wow. This is.. beautiful. Hee. Dangit. It's wrong to say 'hee'. This is not 'hee'. This is.. Christ, I don't know. Whatever. *g* This was a nice read. Please, more.

[identity profile] twoskeletons.livejournal.com 2003-12-18 12:15 pm (UTC)(link)
Hee's cool. I'd settle for hee. :) Thanks, glad you liked.
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[personal profile] laurenthemself 2004-03-18 05:10 am (UTC)(link)
The wind carries it a few feet, then you turn around and follow Bartleby because you don't want to see it touch the ground.

That's one of the most beautiful endings for a story I've ever read.

[identity profile] twoskeletons.livejournal.com 2004-03-18 07:56 am (UTC)(link)
Thanks, man. :)

[identity profile] lux--aeterna.livejournal.com 2004-07-02 02:24 am (UTC)(link)
i love you.

i want to eat your brains.

[identity profile] lux--aeterna.livejournal.com 2004-07-02 02:30 am (UTC)(link)
mmm salt and brains.

hey! do you have aim? might as well chat with ya considering how many lj comments we pass back and forth. mine's tomatoesandwires if you have it.

[identity profile] twoskeletons.livejournal.com 2004-07-02 02:57 am (UTC)(link)
I do! I do have AIM. Like. bewarethefrisbee. Eh, you can so tell I got the account as soon as summer camp ended.

[identity profile] angelfirenze.livejournal.com 2007-09-29 04:38 am (UTC)(link)
I found this while searching for post-Dogma fanfiction. This is fantastic. One of my favorite scenes in Dogma was Bartleby's pained deposition on his and Loki's exile from heaven. I can hear the pain in his voice and it hurts. I hurt for him. Oddly enough, I think he may be my favorite character after all. Well, aside from Metatron. There is no beating Metatron. He wins at above!life.

Anyway, this was fantastic and deserves all the commentary it can get.