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Las ([personal profile] whynot) wrote2008-06-16 02:20 am

[...the darkness no longer hinders them...]

Inspired by [livejournal.com profile] 1sentence, but I can't post this there because a) I didn't claim a pairing, b) it's mostly not pairings, c) this is only 29 sentences, d) I didn't use their prompt words, and e) I didn't use any prompt words.


Where No Carnations Fade
Chronicles of Narnia. Tumnus/Lucy, Peter, Edmund. PG13. Spoilers: The Last Battle.
After the last battle, in the garden.



Peter replies ‘no’ and Edmund replies ‘probably not’ but Lucy wonders how well you remember someone you can’t mourn.

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“Me too,” says Tumnus, and Lucy smiles as he tucks a lock of hair behind her ear.

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Peter wraps his fingers around his sword blade and squeezes; blood wells up but – just as he suspects – it is gone in a moment and the wound leaves no scar.

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“Not a chance, I bet your corpse was uglier than mine!”

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Lucy tries to miss Susan sometimes, and she tries and she tries and she tries.

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The Nymph, giddy with wine, falls into Edmund’s lap, and he lets her.

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“I don’t know, probably married and producing babies at an alarming rate,” but Peter frowns and tells him not to be horrid.

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Blades flashing, Peter and Edmund spar late into the night, because the darkness no longer hinders them, and continue into the sunrise, because exhaustion is impossible.

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“Well, then how did she take her tea?” Lucy challenges, and Peter finds that he’s quite forgotten.

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The single thing that makes Edmund feel like a kid all over again is discovering he can breathe underwater, that no matter how long he adventures with the Dolphins or how many Mermaids he’s kissed, his fingers never prune and he never feels cold.

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“But I want to miss her.”

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And as Aslan draws near, Peter finds he still isn’t sure exactly what he will say to the Lion.

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Tumnus takes his time and kisses Lucy until she sees stars.

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“Come off it,” says Edmund, knocking the crown off Peter’s head, “everyone’s High King here.”

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“It’s not your place,” says Aslan, “to know where the others go.”

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Edmund doesn’t see the point of the exercise but Peter is insistent and won’t leave him alone, so at the count of three he sinks the dagger into Peter’s chest, and they watch in silence as the wound closes itself again like life in reverse.

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It’s some brunette this time, an Archenlander with a jaunty smile and a throaty laugh; not that it matters, Edmund figures, for they all writhe underneath him just the same.

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“After all, we all get what we need, what we deserve,” and it is impossible to feel frustrated here so Peter, at most, is curious and confused.

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When her talk of Susan begins to get repetitive, Tumnus gently sweeps aside the curtain of her hair and kisses the nape of her neck.

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“Told you,” shrugs Edmund, and Peter refuses the wine his brother offers him.

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Lucy is not afraid of Aslan and will never be, but these days she only walks to greet him, never runs.

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Edmund does wonder occasionally what the funeral must’ve been like, and how much Susan would have cried, if she did.

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Surely, then, there must be other paradises, just as there are other worlds, so that maybe when Susan ends up in one of them, Lucy can visit – they both must have such stories to tell each other.

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Peter bites into the pear and it is the sweetest pear, and when he drinks from the river it is the coolest water, and when he looks up at the bluest of skies he wonders, in that familiar detached way, if this is, in fact, it.

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“Which ‘home’?” Edmund asks, and Lucy laughs.

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When Lucy finds out that one doesn’t bear children in this place she doesn’t cry, but Tumnus has learned to recognize her silences and he holds her anyway.

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“Well, where else would you go?”

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Lucy sometimes asks Aslan to let her see Susan, for she knows she must at least ask even though, because one can’t feel distraught here, she’s forgotten what it’s like to want to.

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“Tell us!” said the Foxes, and “Tell us!” said the Hares, so Edmund asks for his goblet to be refilled although his speech has begun to slur, and he begins the story the same way as always: “It was wartime in England, and the people thought it fit to send all children to the country, where they would be safe…”

[identity profile] westingturtle.livejournal.com 2008-06-17 06:27 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, but this is so sad! A paradise where you can't even mourn for what you've lost.

[identity profile] twoskeletons.livejournal.com 2008-06-18 08:06 am (UTC)(link)
Yeah, I've always wondered how it worked out in that place. I mean sure they can't suffer again but surely they can't forget all about Susan.

[identity profile] liminalliz.livejournal.com 2008-06-18 12:21 pm (UTC)(link)
Beautifully done; I absolutely enjoyed it!

[identity profile] twoskeletons.livejournal.com 2008-06-19 07:57 am (UTC)(link)
Thanks!

[identity profile] girlgroovy3.livejournal.com 2008-06-19 05:37 pm (UTC)(link)
I LOVE it. Really. I love the character you gave Edmund, and I loved the subtext that you read into inbetween sentences. This is rapidly growing to become one of my favorite types of fiction. Great job! :D

[identity profile] twoskeletons.livejournal.com 2008-06-19 06:03 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! Yeah, I really think 1sentence are on to something here -- it's fun to write.

[identity profile] the-grynne.livejournal.com 2008-06-23 12:30 am (UTC)(link)
Heaven scares me more than the idea of Hell. You've touched the eeriness of it very well. Lovely story.

[identity profile] twoskeletons.livejournal.com 2008-06-23 01:56 am (UTC)(link)
Thanks! Ya, the Narnia heaven is pretty damn creepy. I mean, it sounds fun, but also weirdly vulnerable to amorality. Glad you liked.

[identity profile] katherine-lupin.livejournal.com 2009-11-22 11:43 am (UTC)(link)
completely agree with you :S
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[identity profile] fahye.livejournal.com 2008-06-25 01:34 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, wow! These just keep piling up and piling up with heavy unspoken meaning, and the final effect is amazing. After much difficulty choosing, I think my favourites are the ones with Peter's experimentation with wounds and death.

[identity profile] twoskeletons.livejournal.com 2008-06-25 08:13 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh thank you lots! I really do think [livejournal.com profile] 1sentence is on to a great idea, I feel this fic's indebted to it. Makes you cut the BS.

[identity profile] mymatedave.livejournal.com 2008-07-13 03:14 pm (UTC)(link)
Brilliantly done.

[identity profile] twoskeletons.livejournal.com 2008-07-13 06:13 pm (UTC)(link)
Thanks, glad you think so!

[identity profile] caramelsilver.livejournal.com 2008-10-17 04:36 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh My God. This was all kinds of wonderful and I'm having problems with telling you how awesome this is. First I thought the sentences were independent of each other, but after a while I saw the connection. Aslan's Country is a little creepy. It's like they're all high or something.

Oh, and could I friend you?

[identity profile] twoskeletons.livejournal.com 2008-10-17 07:01 pm (UTC)(link)
thank you so much! yeah, aslan's country is just a liiiiiiiittle bit creepy. i'm trying to write a fic now where it's not, but we'll see if it ever gets finished. haha and of course you may friend me. :)

[identity profile] tattooedsiren.livejournal.com 2009-01-15 12:18 am (UTC)(link)
These were so great. Very evocative.

[identity profile] twoskeletons.livejournal.com 2009-01-15 03:16 am (UTC)(link)
Thanks!

[identity profile] fresica.livejournal.com 2009-02-13 05:09 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow, that's kind of a punch in the gut, isn't it? Makes you wonder if good is really good without bad to balance it...

[identity profile] twoskeletons.livejournal.com 2009-02-14 02:58 am (UTC)(link)
That's what I was thinking! Aslan's Country is really kind of creepy. Oh Lewis.

[identity profile] chickwith-stick.livejournal.com 2009-08-29 06:11 pm (UTC)(link)
Argh. This is heartbreaking and wonderful.

Lucy is not afraid of Aslan and will never be, but these days she only walks to greet him, never runs.

Gugh. I also love, love the Lucy/Tumnus.

[identity profile] twoskeletons.livejournal.com 2009-08-29 06:37 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you! Glad you liked it. :)

[identity profile] katherine-lupin.livejournal.com 2009-11-22 11:51 am (UTC)(link)
oh my God!! I loved this, but yes it is freakingly creepy I've just decided that maybe going to heaven is not that good, I need a balance I dont know but with time I surely would get bored or start feeling empty even though thats impossible in there but I think thats how I'll feel I mean, how can you appreciate good when you dont know what bad is... really I would rather live life again in this world or another with all the things it comes with but at least I would feel...balanced to put it in a way ....:S
Oh I loooooved Edmund, how you depicted him, it was perfect, and Lucy/Tumnus was so so sweet, and I dont know maybe I misunderstood it but was Peter worrying over Susan?? I think he was.
Awesome story.

[identity profile] twoskeletons.livejournal.com 2009-11-22 07:27 pm (UTC)(link)
But what if you were unable to feel anything except happiness? :) In The Last Battle, they tried to but couldn't feel fear. And yeah, Peter and Lucy both worry about Susan.

Thank you so much! <3